February 18, 2011

LA Readers Response 2/18/2011

The two stories we read in LA on Friday

     The two stories that we read were really different... I think the person who wrote the first one copied the story we read in that big packet, just in a different point of view. Plus that story sounds really weird coming from a 7th graders mouth, rather than a 10th graders mouth. And even if he wanted it to sound a little realistic don't say you have a 14 year old daughter when you are 13! I personally think he should have gotten a 1 not a 2, and I'm not surprised that Ms. Green was worried when she read this paper.
     The second story wasn't that bad, it was pretty believable even though it was fiction. Though I think it should have gotten a 3 not a 4 because it wasn't written very well, it kind of just listed the events didn't really describe the key moments and the ending wasn't very good either. But I think I can learn a lesson from reading these two narrative, number one if your going to write fiction make it believable, number two don't write about the topic that the first one was about, and most of all indent all my paragraphs.

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